hello boys and girls um my name is Rosia and I am going to read my personal statement today I applied for medicine back two years ago and I got into imperial UCL Kings College London and Cambridge with this personal statement so I'll be reading it and also giving some like thoughts about where my thought processes were whilst writing it so that hopefully it can help you guys and this video is sponsored by modify so they're giving me the opportunity to give one of you guys free access to their personal statement course and then another one
if we access the vmap course and someone else for access to the interview course so do keep on watching and comment and like on this video for a chance to be able to win one of those I'll be picking someone at random my first paragraph my personal statement was pretty long for a personal statement it's took up about 10 lines 11 lines in the UK's personal statement box and but I wanted to make the first paragraph really personal and like you know grab the heart of the reader excellence in the Praxis of medicine involves the
Integrity of science Amalgamated with the art of kindness this has become increasingly apparent to me throughout my personal Journey starting with seeing the suffering of family members caused by dementia and OCD this piqued my interest in the human brain and led me to read articles and online information on ssris and the genetics of OCD it's also broadened my perspectives on the limitations of drugs the fact that my father was cured from the debilitating effects of OCD without the use of drugs due to concern of adverse health effects on his future children illustrates the significance of
holistic care where a doctor's personality arguably plays as crucial a role as medical knowledge from being a patient myself I also appreciate that the best doctors offer human touches of love compassion and optimism my desire to emulate these traits and learn cutting-edge medical science as a future doctor has never been stronger so that is the first paragraph what I can say is that at Cambridge at least does read your personal statement so on one of my interview notes he asked me some questions about neurotransmitters and acylcholinesterase which you know is literally the concept of ssris
and how they work and I didn't know the answer so that didn't like come across as very well because I mentioned that I read articles and online information about OCD and ssris so I should be able to back that up in my interviews so make sure everything that you do right in your personal statement you're really prepared to back up with the relevant scientific and personal knowledge I think I also centered my personal statement on me being interested in neurobiology and Neuroscience because that is something that's always just fascinated me I don't know much about
it because I haven't even started studying that because it's a second year Cambridge Medical topic but I think having a broad theme like a direction of somewhere where you want to go it like gives off a good impression because it's saying like this girl kind of knows what she wants even though she's not like you know I'm definitely gonna do this it has a theme so they can it can help me stand out as this girl is a girl who likes neurology the second paragraph goes from lines 12 to 21. reading books by Paul kalinithi
Oliver Sacks Siddhartha Mukherjee and ATO gawande introduced me to the Stark realities and mesmerizing science of Medicine I saw this at firsthand during work experience at the Royal Brompton Hospital where I witnessed the exhaustion and emotional resilience inherent in practicing medicine assisting nurses gave me the opportunity to befriend patients and hear their stories even admits the unpredictability of cancer the uniqueness of the doctor-patient relationship Shone through the professionalism shown by doctors such as during a complex operation involving acute blood loss was inspiring however although the multi-disciplinary team was defined by collaboration doctors are still imperfect
I therefore read when doctors don't listen which challenged my previous thoughts on diagnostic processes so there's a lot in this paragraph because I talk about books that I've read which is kind of the general Vibe so I list authors rather than individual books and I also talk about a specific book which not many people might have known about so this one's called when doctors don't listen and I think I found this book through just like reading lots of online articles about medicine and finding authors that have written more like Niche books and books which people
don't know as much about so I'm really glad I read that book because it was very clear nickel and it gave me something to talk about which other Unis might like because they're thinking this girl has thought about that actually being a doctor means that people you're still imperfect and you're trying to be a detective working out some things and you won't get everything right so actually like reading books to find out what a career in medicine would be like realistically I also talk about my work experience at the Royal Bloomington Hospital so I did
a week there I also want to make a video about how to make the most of your work experience so do subscribe for that and it was a very eye-opening experience I pointed out a specific event that I witnessed so a complex operation involving acute blood loss which demonstrates that I was taking note of like the operations I watched and the things I did and I also talked about how I assisted nurses and had the opportunity to befriend patients so the doctor which I was shadowing gave me Thursday to help out the nurses instead of
just you know watching him do things and that was really insightful because like I helped them change bed sheets monitor blood oxygen and just had time to chill with the patients and talk about their lives and I realized that I do love patient interaction so I also used lots of keywords like multi-discipline keywords like multi-disciplinary team and doctor-patient relationship these words are very important to let the interviewers know that you understand what it means to be a doctor because it is all about teamwork it is for most Specialties about how you treat your patients and
how much love you show them because then can't robots just prescribe drugs actually medicine is as much of an art as it is a science and if not more actually so I'm glad I use those words because they are keywords which they will be looking for as they go through your personal statement the next paragraph that I wrote was from lines 22 to 29. I witnessed the ubiquity of neurological disorders among the elderly while visiting Care Homes to perform music this inspired my epq in which I explored the role of Music interventions in the reduction
of agitation in patients with dementia for which aging is a compounding Factor Nessa carries the epigenetics Revolution and Nick Lane's oxygen introduced me to the ideas of oxidative stress and epigenetic markers and I found their links of the mechanisms of Aging fascinating in turn this led me to give a presentation entitled aging colon a thing of the past question mark which further expanded my knowledge on the ethical issues of elongating human lifespans I like this paragraph because it I think it really appeals to Oxbridge admissions because it shows like okay first I went to Care
Homes to perform music which used the skills that I have to make a positive impact but I that didn't just stop there I was thinking about questions as I was doing that so that led to me doing my epq which was about exploring the role of Music interventions in the reduction of agitation in patients with dementia I actually got full marks for the evq and hopefully I'll make a video One day about my tips for it but generally just write a lot for your planning and process behind your epq and then it didn't just stop
there that led me to think about aging which involves oxidative stress and epigenetic markers and that doesn't stop there I also used Knowledge from books that I read including the epigenetics Revolution and Nick cleans oxygen it's also supplemented I don't know what's going on with my hair that's quite cute um and during the summer holidays before my uni applications I actually read nclean's oxygen Fire audiobook and I'd really recommend that because you're I for example I was just going on runs and I didn't need to fully digest every word but I it wasn't lying to
say that I read it and I really enjoyed the latter half of nicklin's oxygen as it does really go into the biochemical basis of like human life and things like that which I would recommend if you're applying to Natural Sciences or medicine but it's not like I remembered much of it but if I were to tell you to include those kind of books in your personal statement I'd also recommend you to research just think about one or two facts that you want to remember from those books which have personally stood out the most to you
so you remember them for the interview just in case they ask you specifically about those books also I thought about a presentation which I gave which shows that not only can I write essays like for my epq but I also enjoy presenting and I was actually the president of my school's biomedical Society so the next paragraph form is lines 30 to 36 is the next paragraph so you can to enhance my teamwork skills and willingness to serve I spent four weeks at English camps leading international students despite language barriers and sometimes difficult behaviors I formed
relationships with a variety of people I also learned to think independently through two Christmases volunteering as the children's teacher particularly when trying to Aid understanding by adjusting my communication style to each child my resilience was tested and ultimately strengthened through working with an autistic child who might help to better understand the world around him by using drawing to enhance our communication I really like this paragraph because it set out at the start what I learned from the following experiences that I will detail in the next paragraph So I said seeking to enhance my teamwork skills
and willingness to serve so as you remember before I mentioned multi-disciplinary team so I linked it back to my work experience how I saw the teamwork and then I took action to be able to experience teamwork and discover what it means for me and improve how I work in a team and I think that's really important for a person like making it flowy so things are the start link to things in the middle which link to things at the end both within each paragraph and within the whole personal statement and yours can be different to
mine in how you link it but I think the best way to do it is to think of something which you've seen and maybe volunteering or work experience or something you've read or something you've researched and then think about what action you took to implement what you saw to be able to discover more or to improve something within yourself which is related to the course which you're applying for and I talked about volunteering at a Christian children's camp and just talked about basically me liking to form relationships with other people and that's really the essence
of the art of medicine is to be able to put yourselves in other people's shoes and adjust your communication needs to different people for example my work experience I saw that the consultant always asked the patients before surgery do you know what a deep vein thrombosis is something along those lines and he always asks with such patience so he didn't assume that the patients knew what it was but he also didn't condescend them by asking them just in case they knew already so the next paragraph the fifth one is from lines 37 to 42. as
a delegate at Yale Center beijing's conference for young Global Scholars actively debating the most pressing issues of today confirm my conviction to shape the future of our world for the better armed with the universalizing force of Medicine I have subsequently been invited to become an ambassador for the program recent events have shown the value of global cooperation and I hope my diverse cultural experiences will allow me to empathize with people of all backgrounds I like this paragraph because I hope it kind of made me stand out in the sense that I have a lot of
international experiences also as a third culture child I went to China a lot during the summer so I wanted to leverage that to my advantage by bringing in other International experiences that I have because that can all relate back to medicine and how it is really a universalizing Force for good because you have doctors everywhere Health Care needs are Universal across all people and they're so important to everyone and I mentioned lots of things that I've done before such a young Global Scholars which I'd really recommend you applying for and also things I enjoy doing
like debating and being an ambassador it shows that it's really important to take initiative and action yourselves and really show that through linking things that you've done and then consequences of what you've learned through your own projects and presentations and research then my next sentence paragraph sorry is the last one so it's the conclusion and that's lines 43 to 47 which says captioning teams and representing my county in badminton has constantly pushed me in the face of adversities and while I continue to relish every academic interpersonal Musical and sporting challenge I'm more eagerly await the
start of a long journey of formal learning of studying for a medical degree it is a journey that I shall Embrace with my whole heart and mind so my teacher said that was very hollywood-esque finishing which I agree with but that's kind of is my personality like I like to romanticize things and studying medicine is to be romanticized I mean if you're gonna suffer for it for it you might as well romanticize it please don't be too stressed by writing a personal statement just think about everything that you've done related to the course that you're
applying for and you still have time to read chapters of books and pick out a little bit here and there which you want to include in your personal statement also research articles could be a shout if you're in Oxbridge or a more academic University's medical applicant and don't stress about fitting in too many things because the things that you can't fit in you can ask your school teachers to put in your reference instead which also shows the Oxbridge admissions tutor kind of a well-rounded passionate person you are because they want someone who's teachable someone who
takes initiative and their own learning and someone who is actually passionate and eager to study a subject which they love so much so I wish you the best of luck in your application and let me know if you have any specific questions that you want me to answer in the YouTube comments is the fastest way to reach me probably and please could you comment if you want to win the personal statement be met or interview course and see you soon
